I received my tutor’s feedback in writing for this assignment. I appreciate the circumstances that made a video / audio conversation difficult, but I find that a live exchange is much more effective for learning than reading a response in text. A live chat lets me ask whether I have understood properly and to ask questions—the back-and-forth exchange can be quite quick. Text does not really allow for much conversation and it is possible to read too much or too little into a sentence or two of commentary.
In spite of all that, the feedback was helpful although it left me scratching my head at first. R. writes that “visually I’d like to see you take this further” but, when you think you’ve already taken it farther than you’ve been before, where do you go next? So, I had to chew on his words a bit more:
- Contact sheets too small: I’m not sure what the problem is, because they seem to expand to the same size as the sheets I’ve posted before. I’ll check. Nice to hear that they “look like aesthetic objects in their own right,” though. Perhaps I should just have submitted the contact sheets! (I’m kidding, of course.)
- Location uninspiring: fair enough. Our back room doesn’t always inspire me, either, but I needed somewhere to work in the evening, out of the cold. I also agree with not cutting off my feet, smoothing out my shirt and making sure items like electrical outlets are not visible. These are all legitimate points about the imagery and I got too caught up in the fact that I was pushing myself to do a self-portrait and approximate dancing.
- R.’s next points were very helpful to me as I reflected on them:
- “we’re looking for something visually improbable/unknown.”
- “Can you take your iPod out somewhere? The figure in location has so much potential, a lot of people are working on this at the moment. You need to choose your location with care, it’s hugely important what you, the photographer, see in it. It’s not a backdrop, the relationship is between the figure and the environment.”
- And his assessment of areas for development really caught my attention: “Think visually, I feel you’re emphasising the ideas more than the visual realisation at the moment.”
I thought this last point was particularly fair and that visual payoff of my work was not as effective as it could be. If I hadn’t told you that I was disliked having my picture taken and that I was afraid of dancing, you would not have known it from the four images I presented. After thinking about all this, I decided to go back to what I wrote in my presentation of A3 and a single phrase caught my attention: “…ask me to put music and movement together in front of other people and I turn white with cold fear” (https://alancandn.home.blog/2019/11/19/a3-rethinking/).
It occurred to me that “I turn white cold with fear” is not just a vivid description of a feeling, but of an image, and that is the picture I need to show the viewer.
And so I have re-shot A3 to tell a more effective visual story, keeping in mind both my narrative and the need to draw on an interesting context that supports the narrative.